Hello everybody!
I mentioned when, and if, I ever get around to start writing, I will publish my writing here!
Here below is a glimpse at a short story I am working on! More to come next Sunday! Any feedback is welcome, so please let me know in the comments what do you think sould / will happen!
Have a nice week ahead!
We were celebrating the first victory of the year. The governors had decided against the Emotion Law because of the protests in the last few days. Livy was sitting in front of me, sipping her beer and pointing towards something with a cigarette in her hand. We were free. For now, anyway. A tall guy with a strong jawline and baby blue eyes entered the bar. He stopped and grinned when he saw Livy, and started making his way towards our table. I left to grab a drink, realized maybe I was being impolite and came back to hear him talk to Livy.
“So…” he said after he caught her in a bear hug “who’s your friend who’s gonna serve me breakfast tomorrow morning?”
Livy smacked himover the arm and made an apologetic face my way. Who does this guy think he is? God’s gift to women?
“I don’t “do” breakfast!” I answered, slightly annoyed. “I actually came back to ask if I could get you something from the bar, but I see you can’t stay! I’d say it was nice to meet you, but I don’t lie to people as a first impression!” I headed back to the bar, leaving him to collect his jaw from the floor. I honestly don’t know where that came from. I am never confrontational, and the best replies I have are usually at five thirty in the morning, after about two years, when I cannot sleep due to social anxiety. My blood was boiling. Who treats people like that?
Very talented writer! Can’t wait to read what happens next! x
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Thank you! Part 2 is already on the blog, and part 3 is coming up this Sunday!
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I can’t help but really work on my imagination in every sentence of your narrative!! That’s so cool! Coz that means your writing is really effective and hits my neurons to actually let me imagine your story!! Loving it!!
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Thank you very much! I am glad you enjoyed reading this!
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You have a lot of talent for writing here. I can’t wait to read what comes next. Thanks for sharing!
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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Hi there Irina. First, I read the second part then came back and read the first part. This is very interesting, you sure have a talent of telling stories. Keep that up.
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Thank you very much! I am working on a lot right now, I hope to publish something else soon! Also, part 3 is coming up next Sunday! 🙂
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This guy sounds like a douche! Look forward to part 2!
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Thank you! Part 2 will be up tomorrow morning!
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Part 2 is up today! 🙂
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You have a talent my dear! keep it up! I will def be back to read in the future ❤
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Thank you very much! Part 2 will be up next Sunday!
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Excellent response, what a crazy introduction! There are so many ridiculous approaches and pick up lines, it’s hard to know what you’re going to get when you’re out.
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Thank you!
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Haha! I really love the response of the woman. The guy deserved what happened. But too often I have been that person who finds the come back several hours later.
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That happens to me too!
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Interesting short story! I am hooked, I can’t wait to read more.
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Thank you very much!
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I’m curious to see where this story goes. My advice would be to write the entire piece before coming back for edits. Let the story take you where it wants to go.
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Thank you!
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Haha! Love the attitude. Would love to learn more about this character.
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Thank you! You will, soon enough! 🙂
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You are a talented writer! Can’t wait to read the rest later this week!
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Thank you very much! I hope you enjoy it!
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Waiting to read more of this story. I write too but that is away from blogging. However, great style.
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Thank you very much! I hope you will like the rest of the short story!
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You atta girl! That’s a good smacked! He deserves your response and I am proud of you 😀
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Thank you! 🙂
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I’m intrigued to learn more about this character! Great start on your story! You certainly have my attention.
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Thank you very much! Another part of the story is coming next Sunday! 🙂
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I’m looking forward to it
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